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OK first, I'm sorry I'm "sooooo late" with my comment ;-) :P
Here goes! Get ready!
Brian, my friend, you are getting onto thin ice. Getting in between a funny back and forth between friends? Asking for a HotStuff (don't be jealous of the girl friends man, not cool), checking to hear if you are still hot? Putting your hand on her thigh? HOLDING HER FUCKING HAND?!!?! Brian, you are soooo deep in right now. And you fucking know it. If you really aren't ready to admit yet, you shouldn't even get in everything I mentioned before and try to pretend to be a grown up man who doesn't have a quickly developing crush on his fosterchild. Don't get me wrong, I can't wait for him to fall of the wagon, but for the storysake and the "it's all wrong"-sake... you should at least pretend :P
Okay, I can skip the school stuff right? I mean, she doesn't want to move away from Brian anyway and everything else was just.. well.. maybe she'll make it anyway, but who cares... I have more important stuff to get to.
For the first time this story I kinda didn't like Tammy. She was selfish instead of supporting her friend. I don't really like Aaron, but for now he is nice to Kimmie and so are his friends. I get all the issues Tammy always had, but she had no right to go off on Kimmie like that. That's just mean. I know I know, she had her reasons. I know she's been through a lot, but I still didn't like it. Kimmie didn't deserve it.
Oh, one thing more about the school day... I do love all the sarcastic remarks. But you know... that's your writing. You make it seem so effortless and I know it's not, but just take the compliment, okay? You make it seem so so damn lifely, and I really feel like being there. Like standing there watching the scene. It's amazing.
Allright, let's get to my man Matt. My heart breaks everytime you write about him. I know it's too soon to get better, but I really want it to. I hate seeing him hurt like this. Trying his best over all his grief. I really can't stand seeing him like this. But I love how Kimmie knows this baby stuff. How she so easily gets the baby to be quiet and calm. And what I like most about it is that she isn't solving it for Matt, but teaching him how. But damn, just fix the man soon, I can't take it.
And here's a small peek of the fangirl.. I can't wait for Kimmie to spend more time with Matt and Aiden, taking care of the small guy.
I hope this comment makes up for me being not here on the first day. I'll just end with what I always do.. Please, Please, Please write! I'm begging you, this story makes my day, my week, my life. I want to read more now things are looking up!
Love you lekker ding! <3
@Uhavetobekiddingme
Thank you!! Are you my new subscriber? I've been trying hard to get back into this so updates can be slow going. I have some finished stories to occupy your time if you want to check them out. Just click on my user name :)
@Kimmie
Oh Kimmie what do I say to this? The girls or more so Kimmie will make an entrance into Matt's life in the next chapter.
As for Brian and Tammy.....I think someone is about to gum up the works. :) <3
OH MY GOD Tammy!! You updated! So so quickly!
You know you spoiled me now, right? You know that I won't accept a longer waiting time? :P
Ah, I don't have to tell you all this, you will know I will make you crazy asking for the next chapter... so let's talk about this one!
You write, I reward you with a nice long comment (and so fast... whaa whaa whaa *crowds cheering*)
This chapter was kind heartbreaking and at the same time endearing. That "I can't do this" just broke my heart.
I really love the friendship. This is what friends do. They step up. Even when the friend they are caring for doesn't want anything to do with it. I'm happy they pushed through and managed to let Matt chuckle a few times. It made me think he wasn't really a lost cause.
And I was right! I'm so proud of him that he realized what he was doing. I'm not convinced he will stop the drinking.. but I'm sure he will get all the help he needs. Maybe his realisation and a firm talk with one of his favorite students will get him back on the right track? There is a little boy who needs you man.... You can do it.
To close this whole thing off, let's talk about Brian for a bit. I loved his talk with Johnny, couldn't have said it better myself ;-) I do think the kiss came from the routine thing... maybe I even said it in my comment, but you know... If you don't feel attracted or connected to the person, I don't believe it will go this easily. So yes, those emotions are definitely into play already. And I think both Johnny and Brian realize. I'm really curious on how this will develop. Will Brian take some distance? Making Tammy doubting everything again? Will Johnny do something? Or will they cross the line first?
So many question, so you know whats coming... Get your cute ass to writing the next chapter. I'm a spoiled brat. I need more! Your story is one of the few lights in this stupid thing call quarantaining in times of Corona!
Luv you hun! I'm so happy you are writing again. It's too damn good to let it go to waste.
@Kimmie
You will be happy to know I started it today. Not sure how long it will take since I'm making up this chapter as I go.
Promise it won't be a year though :)
@Kimmie
That's good. Hope things get better.
And I know you want this story. I'll be working on it. Just been having the other one rolling around in my head lately and had to get some of it out. Haven't updated that one in 3 years but it still early in that story.
I've reread this one too so I can try to get motivated to write the next update. Hoping it won't take another year lol.
@xSilverPearlx
No it's not Corona. Just some personal stuff...
and I don't need a medieval story, I need this one :p
@Kimmie
Oh and by the way I may not have started on the next update yet but I may have an update for a certain mid-evil story I'm doing soon.
@Kimmie
You're still not feeling well? Is it the same illness you had when I posted? That was like a month ago. Hope everything is alright and not to serious. I worried now with this Corona virus going around. I hope it's nothing like that. Be safe Hot Stuff
Where do I even start?!I'm so in love with this story, I can't even...Right before you updated I started rereading this whole thing, ready to have just enought ammo to get you to writing again. But during rereading I found so many things I had already put to the back of my brain. And then you came with a new chapter.. and that chapter is... Man...
Let me try to get this in a comment that isn't as long as the chapter :D
I will get to the whole married couple-routine that was starting this chapter in a minute.
First I would like to address the talk they had. When I reread the story and the scene where Tammy dreamed Brian was going to hand her over to that asshole again. I could totally feel her. I mean, she just isn't used to people being angry or upset with her without it having serious consequences. I think this conversation must have that feeling for her too a little. She slowly begins to settle in the feeling that Brian isn't goint to send her away and I really like that she is getting that trust.
Okay, let's get to the interesting part! Tammy being a total Orange County housewife and Brian just accepting like they have never done anything else. They are really cute together and I think there is a reason it is this easy.. But I guess things aren't going to go that smoothly, right? I love your writing in this though. It's so flowy and easy and you can totally see the whole scene. I would have liked for Brian not to realize the whole thing yet, because this is probably going to send him in to overthinking.
Then Matt.. my poor poor Matt. I hate seeing him like this. I know it has to happen, but damn it really hurts (compliments for you again, seeing I could feel it through my bones). I'm happy senior took the baby, Matt would never forgive himself if something happened to him, but he is just not able to take care of the baby right now. I hope Kimmie can talk some sense into him. Or maybe the guys, but I have a feeling they would just make him angry. Just send the girl in.
To close this extended review. I loved the back and forth with Brian senior. I love how you write him. Actually, I love how you write everyone in more funny sarcastic scenes.
Okay.... I have only one thing left to say. Maybe you should come closer... No a little closer... a little more please... Are you listening? Really listening?
DON'T EVER MAKE ME FUCKING WAIT ON A CHAPTER ON THIS STORY FOR THAT LONG! YOU BETTER GET TO WRITING! LIKE NOW!
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@Kimmie
This totally made up for the wait :)
First Brian. He's just not use to having to hide something like this like Tammy has. She's had her crush for awhile and is use to hiding secrets and actions. Some of what he does is completely innocent, just trying to make her feel better, but the other he just doesn't know how to deal with or control it. But like I said in a previous comment...someone is about to gum up the works.
As for Tammy turning on the bitch switch with Kimmie, she knows she fucked up. First day back was an uncomfortable shock to her and she took it out on the wrong person. But I think the little pep talk she got from her favorite teacher will help.
And finally Matt. What can I say about this poor broken man? It's going to take some time for him to get over this. The love of his life is gone now and he just doesn't know how to deal. It's not something someone just gets over. Eventually he's going to see though that there's someone else out there that can love him just as much if not more :)
always love you long comments Hot Stuff <3
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